Reigning Unova - Page 16

This comic is overall very nicely done! I really love the manga influence and the crosshatch shading. To me, it seems that this comis needs some more love (and comments).

About this page in particulair. I love your way of drawing eyes, but overall you might want to add some more thickness to you lines here and there, now the characters are rather flat. The 'shock' panel is throwing me off a little. I can't determine where her shoulder is and overall it look a bit.. weird. I love the design of the female Plasma member and adding the boy (which you never introduced) suggests some interesting plot development.

Some more overall tips on this comic: It would be nice if you took some time to introduce the characters. The boy plays an important part, but is not introduced. Also all the other kids in the camp are not more then shadows, which is a shame. Next to this, I'm still not sure if I'm supposed to read the comic left to right, or right to left.

About my rathes:
Visually I find this comic very appealing, as mentioned before I love the style.
I think it's original and plausible to let someone start their Pokémon experience in a summercamp. Even protective parents could not protest against letting their daughter meet Pokémon in such a protective enviroment.
I think your techniques in using background, effects and shadows are very good.
The impact is a little less, mostly due to the points I mentioned earlier (lack of introduction, confused about reading direction).

I look forward to more updates!